2018年高考英语一轮复习 写作技能培优 第十二讲 满分作文怎样得-三步作文法
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第十二讲 满分作文怎样
[典例研析]
——三步作文法
[示例]
(2016·全国卷乙)假定你是李华，暑假想去一家外资公司兼职，已写好申请书和
个人简历(res
ume)。给外教Ms Jenkins写信，请她帮你修改所附材料的文字和格式(format)。
注意：1.词数100左右；
2．可以适当增加细节，以使行文连贯。
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第一步：依体裁 谋篇章(结构对 第一关)
体裁
内容
应用文 人称 第一人称 时态 一般现在时
写信求助外教帮助修改所附材料的文字和格式
第一段：写信目的
段落
第二段：求助原因， 求助外教修改所附材料的文字和格式
第三段：表达期待
第二步：列要点 选句式(要点全 及格线)
要点一：我是二班李华， 是你的学生。
我写信向你求助。
I’m one of your students.I’m Li Hua
from Class Two.I’m writing to ask you
for
help.
要点二：今年暑假我想去一家外资公司兼职。
This summer I
intend to take up a parttime job in a foreign
capital company.
要点三：申请书和个人简历已完成， 真心地希望老师帮忙修改。
My application and resume have been prepared
and I sincerely hope you can help
me polish
them.
要点四：修改内容
You can help add some
contents and correct some mistakes and format.
要点五：表达期望
I would appreciate it if you
could do me a favor.
Looking forward to your
early reply.
第三步：扣主题 拓展句(句式美 优秀分)
要点一：升级句式(名词作同位语)
I’m one of your students,
Li hua from Class Two.I’m writing to ask you for
help.
要点二拓展：今年暑假去一家外资公司兼职及做兼职的意义(非限制性定语从句)
This summer I intend to take up a parttime
job in a foreign capital company,
through
which I would like to broaden my horizons, gain
some working experience and
meet my new
friends．
要点三拓展：修改内容(Firstly…Secondly…Lastly…)
Firstly, I’m wondering if you can help add
some ly, if there
are some mistakes in them, I
hope you can help correct , I attach some
materials whose format had better be changed
and hope you can help.
[现场阅卷·作文升格]
该生习作为四档作文， 得分为18分。 能覆盖所有内容要点； 大部分句子基本正确，
可
以适当增加复合句的使用； 文章词汇表达基本正确， 希望能更多使用一些高级词汇；
衔接
成分太少， 可以适当添加一些过渡词。
1.第二句experiences改为experience。
2.第六、
七句可升级
v
.ing作状语： I’m writing you a letter,
hoping to get your
guide and suggestions.。
3.文章句子可以适当加入过渡词：what is more, worse still, in
addition, and,
besides, also, furthermore,
too, moreover, as well as, additionally等。
例如第二
段的3、4句之间最好加Worse still。
五档作文
Dear
Ms Jenkins,
I’m one of your students, Li Hua
from Class Two.I’m writing to ask for your
help.
This summer I intend to take up a
parttime job in a foreign capital company,
through which I would like to broaden my
horizons, gain some working experience and
meet new application and resume have been
prepared and I sincerely hope
you can help me
polish y, I’m wondering if you can help add some
s, if there are some mistakes in them, I hope
you can help correct
, I attach some
materials whose format had better be changed and
hope you
can help.
I would appreciate it
if you could take the trouble to do so much for
me.
Looking forward to your early reply.
Yours truly,
Li Hua